Sunday, May 10

Swann is MAD

Yeah..well. I am sure some of the people that are reading my blog has read the latest chapter is my story. Again, then if you are said person then, you read the last sentence. Again may I add that you did not realize that I spent a whole hour on that sentence! >.< Yes I really did spend an hour.

I was fighting cliche (of course). I couldn't come up with something that I liked. So I brainstormed...these are the sentences that didn't made the cut.

Base: “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but

1. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but now it’s my turn, and I will be prepared for your little fairy friends.”

2. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but now, I will defeat you.”

3. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but I am going to win this game that you seem to play.”

4. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but in round two, you are going to be the one who is defeated.”

5. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but, now it’s my turn and I will be prepared for you and your little fairy friends.”

6. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but MUAHAHAHAH!” :)

7. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but..but today is round two and I will be playing straight out. No more misses nice.”

8. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but today is different. Today I will have you once again you cursed dragon. And this time I will be prepared for your little fairy friends.” (this is in the story)

9. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but now I’ll get you and reveal you to the world.”

10. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but now I have to go make brownies.”

11. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but today is going to be different. Today I am going to win and you aren’t going to be able to stop me.”

12. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but now I will hunt you down and make you grovel at my feet.”

13. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but now I will hunt you down and make you grovel at my feet, dragon, begging for mercy.”

14. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but now I know about your little fairy friends, and now they won’t be able to help you.”

15. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but now I know your little secret and in round two…I will win.”

16. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but I will not hold any mercy towards you.”

17. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but, now I know your little secret.”

18. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but right now I think I’ll go to the beach.”

19. “You…” she hissed her eyes hot with fire. “You won round one, but in round two I will stand victorious.”

My mind goes to strange places. O.o Much of it is out of character for Swann but I needed to brainstorm.

What's your favorite?

BF